Week 4 Story Laboratory (Microfiction): The Squirrel

The 100 word story below is written using the squirrel from Ice Age as inspiration. 

The Greedy Squirrel and the Nut

Yellow and orange leaves fall to the ground to be swept away by the whistling wind. Acorns fall to the ground to be swept away by squirrels. A squirrel woke in the early morning to start his daily routine of gathering acorns. On his way back to his den he found a beautiful nut. The greedy squirrel squished it in his mouth that was already carrying two acorns. He scurried along the dark, black ground. He hated this ground. It was scary...Uh-oh. The beautiful nut slipped out of his mouth. He quickly scurried back for it and WHAM. 

Image Information: Black squirrel carrying nut in its mouth (wikimedia)


Here's another 100 word version written from a different perspective. 

The Driver and the Squirrel

Yellow and orange leaves fall to the ground to be swept away by the whistling wind. These leaves flew, flipped, floated, and then finally landed on the freshly, paved road. There was a squirrel on the road. The driver slowed as the squirrel crossed the road. Its mouth swollen and puffy. "What a greedy squirrel" thought the driver. Once it passed, the driver sped up. He never liked to hurt any living creature...Uh-oh. The squirrel was running back into the road. "What a stupid squirrel" thought the driver. The driver tried his best to slow down in time but WHAM. 

Comments

  1. Hi Helen, I really like how you did a perspective change where it really matters from the perspective that is being told and that you sometimes you can't get a full story until you are able to see it from both sides or all of the sides. I also like that the person tried to avoid the greedy squirrel but it was the greedy squirrel that caused his own demise.

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  2. Hey Helen! I thought your flipped story idea was super cool. There are always two sides to every story, and your literal interpretation of that was successful! I think 100-word stories are so cool because you can write something really effective without having to write a lot at all. Great job!

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  3. Hey, Helen!

    As others have already said, I like the change in perspective in your story. I have not seen that yet in other stories, and I personally have not tried doing that on my own. I feel like it adds a lot more detail to the story while enhancing the plot and giving a better POV throughout the rest of your story. I might try doing that in the future, so thank you for the idea!

    Well done.

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